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-Not- A Barbie Girl

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You don't hate her long, tanned, bendable legs. You don't hate her thin stomach that her legs lead to, or the pert, unreal breasts that jut out above them. You don't even hate the slender arms that lift from her tiny torso and turn in three hundred and sixty different degrees.

You're seven, not stupid. You know you shouldn't look like that, not now, not ever. Your friend even told you that if she were a real person, her proportions would be so off that she wouldn't be able to stand.

It doesn't matter. You still hate her, just not for the reasons everyone else does. You hate her, but not for her body. Instead, it's for her hair and her eyes.

Her hair is long and flaxen blonde, pin straight of course. Yours is dark and curly and barely skims your shoulders. Her eyes are bright blue with flecks of tiny white sparkles. Yours are a muddy kind of hazel that won't sparkle even in bright sunlight.

You won't admit it to anyone, but you'd give anything to be her. She looks like angels in the paintings, or like the supermodels in the magazines, things people aspire to be. People will pay a fortune to have their appearances changed to look like she does. No one would pay a time to be made to look like you.

It's too much to handle, so you take her in your hands. Your fingers circle her arms and chest, and the tips of your thumbs rest under the softer plastic of her chin. You squeeze and press upwards, harder and harder as her head tips back but you still get angrier and angrier until-

POP!

Your  curly-haired head detaches from your neck and rolls down your back. Your dark eyes remained open but glazed, which is probably a good thing. Now you can't see that perfect doll fall from your hands, intact and completely invincible.
Actual title: (Not) A Barbie Girl

The deadline for submissions to KU's literary magazine is coming up and I have chosen this piece.

I've posted something like this here before, and that original one has been scrapped (I decided to do that instead of just edit it because I wanted to keep it just in case.)

The idea is still the same- how vanity destroys a person, how futile it is to hate something just because you can't be it, ect. How easy is it to see that? Is it more readable now that I switched it to 2nd-person POV and there's no longer an overabundance of 'She"s?
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cuteeness89's avatar
That's great. I felt like that when I was a little kid. Now I know better,